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Default Re: Defeated by the Champion, an interactive story on CHYOA

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Originally Posted by nanomachines17 [Only Registered Users Can See LinksClick Here To Register]
A bit more of description of her long hair would be cool. Also the thread I was going through had jack meeting her again after beating you and just dropped off. It might be cool to see a rematch where she goes all out and humiliates you again to prove she can do it anytime, anywhere.
I’ll keep that in mind about the hair.

A rematch would probably be a separate story of its own; I was considering a sequel involving her training you.

The drop-off at the end probably has something to do with the way I set up the last chapter; there are a bunch of nested if-statements to create a custom ending for each scenario and one of them might be missing a close-paren or some such. What options did you take to get to the end?
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