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Old 07-Jul-14, 21:23
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Hello, gentlemen. I enjoy writing short stories in my free time, and have recently began writing more frequently. I figured that this story that I wrote was interesting enough to share on this website. It involves a mother and son in an intense wrestling match.

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I would love if I could receive your constructive criticism of this story. Did you like it being in second person? Should I name my characters? Is it too long or too short? Is it entertaining enough? I want to hear everything that you think.

I will probably be writing more stories in the future, so I would also ask if you all could help me choose a plot for the next story.
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Old 07-Jul-14, 22:11
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Great story Gbottyg. I tried it a couple of times answering the questions differently. Great job with that.
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Old 08-Jul-14, 02:30
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Very nice!
I like the mother son plot. I say stick with it. Aunt nephew is good too.
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Old 08-Jul-14, 07:51
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I read through this a couple of times, trying different responses and liked the results each time. I also liked the format of the Inklewriter site for your story and the way it simply continued down rather than branching to a new page. It meant you could read back over the whole thing once you finished.

Thank you for sharing it with us. It was well written, well laid out and the mother seemed very attractive and realistic.
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Old 08-Jul-14, 11:05
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This is so cool! Please write more!
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Old 08-Jul-14, 20:21
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Awesome, would have loved some arm wrestling!
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It was cool but the ending sucked.
It should have ended in a KO.
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Old 09-Jul-14, 19:19
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Loved it!

Would LOVE to see more mother son scissor stories.

Well done!
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Fun story, but I'm disappointed that there's only one path where the son wins.
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Old 10-Jul-14, 06:47
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It was cool but the ending sucked.
It should have ended in a KO.
There were a couple ways for it to end in a KO.
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