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Old 29-Oct-17, 23:41
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Default Interactive Story with 3 Friends

This story is nowhere near complete, but technically it won't ever end. It's a vicious cycle of you wrestling your friends.

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I'd love to hear your feedback and requests for new additions to the story.
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Default Re: Interactive Story with 3 Friends

I like what you've done so far.

Some constructive criticism though: When after fighting one of them you do a rematch, the text is identical to the original match. It's jarring from a story-telling perspective. I don't know if it's possible with writing an interactive story but I think the rematches need to be different. They can be similar (and one can make different choices) but not identical.

Of course this could require having to write new rematches ad infinitum, but I don't think the structure of an endless loop is a good idea. A good story does need to have an end, otherwise it will eventually wear out its welcome. After enough cycles on the time loop it's predictable and therefore not fun.

If I were writing this I'd structure it so that you fight all 3 of them. Then if you can have different rematches, do that. Then at the end of the rematches have some sort of endgame scenario, perhaps where all 3 jump you at once and then go from there to some sort of ending (if you can't do different rematches just skip to the endgame).

In terms of additions, I like the idea of some spots where she's beaten you, you've submitted, but she refuses to let you go and you have to make decisions to try and survive her entrapment of you.
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Old 30-Oct-17, 17:01
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I think it’s good so far and has lots of potential to be a great story once it’s developed further.
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Default Re: Interactive Story with 3 Friends

Off to a fantastic start! Please let us know when you update!
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Default Re: Interactive Story with 3 Friends

Really like it so far. Could definitely use more trash talking from the friends though. That's something I always like with these stories.
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Default Re: Interactive Story with 3 Friends

Actually pretty entertaining. Looking forward for more.
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