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Old 01-Aug-20, 13:32
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Default Re: Wrestling with my exes

Other than a couple of easily forgivable spelling mistakes, mate, that was really well written. The motivation for the girls was very clear as our main characters lack of integrity caught up with him. I liked how easily the girls were able to take him down, as Ashley obviously never told him about her BJJ experience, and she set Lynsey up to be able to take him out of the fight completely. I do hope you continue this story, mate, as I am intrigued to learn what happens when he wakes up.

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