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Hey guys, I started writing an interactive story on CHYOA about a year ago, but only added 4 chapters at the time. I just came back to it and added more chapters, and I want to continue working on it in the future. Would love if you could check it out, any feedback is appreciated!

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Default Re: CHYOA Interactive Mixed Wrestling Story Between Friends

Great setting and action there.

You should go on with the rest if the matches
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Default Re: CHYOA Interactive Mixed Wrestling Story Between Friends

Quick update:

I've continued writing the story. I wrote multiple new endings for the first match and finished the first couple endings for the second match. The plan is to write a couple more endings for the second match then move on to the third.
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Default Re: CHYOA Interactive Mixed Wrestling Story Between Friends

Glad to hear you’re still continuing it it’s a very enjoyable interactive story can’t wait to see what’s next.
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Default Re: CHYOA Interactive Mixed Wrestling Story Between Friends

This is a great story - I hope you continue with it. Like a lot of CHYOA it slips off people’s radar as it’s updated on another site.

One comment I have is that it doesn’t feel like the other characters are watching the matches (maybe that’s a plot point that I’ve missed?).

What you’re coming up with is already great. If you’re open to suggestions then I’d love to see a thread with some of the guys who’ve already lost being trapped in holds and forced to watch what happens next. And Maria needs to fight John once his strength has been sapped by another girl.
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Post Re: CHYOA Interactive Mixed Wrestling Story Between Friends

Hey, thanks for the feedback!

As for the issue with lack of audience engagement you didn't miss a plot point, I just honestly saw it as not a priority going forward. After all I have 7 matches to finish, each with at least 3 main branches, each of which branching into multiple endings, and since I am planning on actually having branches where different characters win, I will need to have 2-3 different branches of the semis and 2-3 different branches of the finals, raising the total to somewhere between 13 and 16 total matches. Honestly the idea of incorporating the audience into every match sounds incredibly exhausting given all that. But I will promise that if I ever get to the end of the series (it won't be soon, but I'm in it for the long haul) I will definitely go back and edit appropriately.

The idea of guys being trapped in holds seems interesting but considering the characters in all the main branches so far have been very friendly (although a tad dominating) and the only clear antagonist being John, it seems kinda weird to have that happens. That said, a subplot where all the girls get super dominant and thrash all the guys and humiliate and dominate them throughout - Ignoring the main branches and storylines I'm trying to tell - sounds like a great branch to work on. And hey, CHYOA allows literally anyone with an account to submit chapters to anyone's story if the story is public in the settings (mine is). So I'm not suggesting anything here but I strongly suggest you consider creating an account and adding whatever you want to my story.

As for Maria, I don't want to spoil any future endings, but let's just say that I didn't put her there for no reason. Same with Dana, as she is playing a role in the story in the past couple chapters I published. Can't promise Maria's role will be soon but I can promise it's coming.

All in all thanks for reading my story and I hope you enjoy it going forward. My dms (and CHYOA chapter submissions page ) are always open if you have any suggestions going forward.
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