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Old 02-Sep-20, 22:44
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Default Poll: Need help with ending for a story

Hi all,

I write stories as jdean72000 for the Diana the Valkyrie site.

I'm mulling over a few stories, one of which I need help writing an ending for.

For this story, a smaller woman beats up and sexually dominates a big, muscular man. At the end, she leaves the room and then comes back for one last humiliation. Should she:

1) be wearing boxing gloves to make him her human punching bag.
2) have a crop or something similar to spank him.
3) be wearing a strap-on dildo.
4) something else - add your own idea!

I think the story would end with the final image when she walks back in the room - you won't actually see what she does since she'll have already done a lot by this point.

I'm leaning toward 3 but curious what everyone else thinks.
Thanks!
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Old 02-Sep-20, 22:48
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Some sort of foot domination/slave training so when she walks in he can crawl over and heel at her side maybe
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Old 02-Sep-20, 23:14
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Tattoo gun.
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Old 02-Sep-20, 23:37
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Default Re: Poll: Need help with ending for a story

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Some sort of foot domination/slave training so when she walks in he can crawl over and heel at her side maybe
Love it. That's a great idea.

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Tattoo gun.
Ooh, creative! Great idea.
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Old 03-Sep-20, 09:27
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I have read some of your stories on Diana's site, mate. The bullies beaten series, where you expand on some of the stories originally told by Hardie were quite good. I enjoyed them a lot. As far as suggesting some kind of end consequence to take the loser's humiliation through the roof, I think it is a matter of degree. If the story you are writing is on the more extreme side, having an escalation like the main character coming back into the room wearing a strap on could be very appropriate. If the action until that point has been more PG, then taking the leap to anal could be a step too far. My suggestion would be to use foreshadowing during the main part of the story, and paying it off at the end. For example, my friend Jericho on this forum wrote a great story called Monica the Machine, in which the main character expresses a claustrophobic fear of smothering holds and the titular character recognises his weakness very quickly and uses it to break him to her will. So, if you plan to have her box with him after defeating him in wrestling, perhaps it would be more effective if he was shown to have a history of hitting women, and thus his final defeat could be a kind of poetic justice. If you are leaning towards the strap-on, perhaps establish that he wanted to have anal sex with her if he wins, and has to suffer the same consequence now that he has lost.

I am not sure how coherent this reply is, or if it is just rambling nonsense. I guess what I am saying is that if they simply have their fight and she comes back with a strap-on out of nowhere, I will probably finish reading the story at that point. I don't find that stuff particularly interesting. But if we have been teased with that consequence, or it is a payoff for story elements introduced earlier, I am far more likely to continue reading.

Regardless of what you decide, I will probably read your stories, mate. I have enjoyed the Bullies Beaten stuff so far, because I really like reading about that stuff told from the girl's point of view. Good luck with your story writing in the future, and thank you for what you've shared so far.
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1) be wearing boxing gloves to make him her human punching bag.
This is my choice. It is also one of my fantasies.
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Old 03-Sep-20, 22:07
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I have read some of your stories on Diana's site, mate. The bullies beaten series, where you expand on some of the stories originally told by Hardie were quite good. I enjoyed them a lot. As far as suggesting some kind of end consequence to take the loser's humiliation through the roof, I think it is a matter of degree. If the story you are writing is on the more extreme side, having an escalation like the main character coming back into the room wearing a strap on could be very appropriate. If the action until that point has been more PG, then taking the leap to anal could be a step too far. My suggestion would be to use foreshadowing during the main part of the story, and paying it off at the end. For example, my friend Jericho on this forum wrote a great story called Monica the Machine, in which the main character expresses a claustrophobic fear of smothering holds and the titular character recognises his weakness very quickly and uses it to break him to her will. So, if you plan to have her box with him after defeating him in wrestling, perhaps it would be more effective if he was shown to have a history of hitting women, and thus his final defeat could be a kind of poetic justice. If you are leaning towards the strap-on, perhaps establish that he wanted to have anal sex with her if he wins, and has to suffer the same consequence now that he has lost.

I am not sure how coherent this reply is, or if it is just rambling nonsense. I guess what I am saying is that if they simply have their fight and she comes back with a strap-on out of nowhere, I will probably finish reading the story at that point. I don't find that stuff particularly interesting. But if we have been teased with that consequence, or it is a payoff for story elements introduced earlier, I am far more likely to continue reading.

Regardless of what you decide, I will probably read your stories, mate. I have enjoyed the Bullies Beaten stuff so far, because I really like reading about that stuff told from the girl's point of view. Good luck with your story writing in the future, and thank you for what you've shared so far.
This definitely makes sense and thank you for such a thoughtful response (and the kind words). I definitely thought of that with the strap-on. I figured he'd first threaten to fuck her up the ass and she would remind him of this as she beats him up. So hopefully it wouldn't seem random.

Very good things to think about!
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Old 04-Sep-20, 13:03
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Definetively, boxing gloves, and one adittion: In some way, she forced him, blackmailed him, enraged or encorauged him to rise and fight back, to make the beating worse and more hummilating.
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I like the strap on idea
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